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sins_and_tragedies
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since 2006-04-26
Posts 41
england

0 posted 2006-05-01 05:45 AM


  
sorry if there is any typo errors i got some false nails on yesterday gor my birthday which is today"!!! and im still getting used to them!!!
" In 5 seconds"

In 5 seconds I lost my best friend- -

In 5 seconds I lost my heart- -

In 5 seconds I gained trust- -

In 5 seconds I gained laughter- -

In 5 seconds I lost laughter and trust- -

In 5 seconds I got hit- -

In 5 seconds I felt cold tears- -

In 5 seconds I cried my self to sleep - -

In 5 seconds I dreamed- -

In 5 seconds I had nightmares- -

In 5 seconds I was back in reality and in 5 seconds I was dead - -

everything happens to fast for anybody to grasp it because life is just one big emotional roller coaster and at the end of that ride god decides weather you go to heaven or hell. So all I can say is live every day like it was your last and capture every moment with your eyes just before you think you forgot all that mattered you actually remember all that didn’t. Sometimes time will not be by your side all your life. Look at what you have not what you desire. Life would be so much better if your desires didn’t get in the way.

is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality

© Copyright 2006 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-05-01 11:13 AM


So, this wasn’t really a poem? At least I don’t think it was, I thought it was more like a word of advice/maybe even warning to everyone…

It’s cool though, liked it, liked all the things you did/saw in those 5 seconds.
Well, maybe not YOU, but … what you wrote in this.

Great job, gives everyone a pause, makes you wonder/reflect on your life a little bit…. Thanks for sharing you ideas on this!

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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
2 posted 2006-05-01 10:08 PM


Loved it.. that's all I can say.. i usually have  a lot more to say lately which is why I'm suprised at myself.. but wow.. this was great.. I loved how you set it up.. poem or not.. great job..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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