Everyday is exactly the same.

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Teen Poetry #7

Everyday is exactly the same.

acid_tears_i_cry
Junior Member

since 2005-11-25

Posts 24
United States, UT

0 posted 2006-04-30 01:01 PM

Stop you screaming, guilt trips of pain, there is no life for me ahead. You killed it all...you killed me....Everyday is exactly the same....he hits me and you scream at me, all becaouse the house is not clean, sry mom but I have a life to clean up, not your stupid house...you want it clean...do it yourself...there is no love here theres only slashing pain, everyday is exactly the same......LEAVE ME ALON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A.N= Sry if this is a little bit off. My mom was screaming at me when I was writing it.

By: Malinda Peterson

Can you read the word "loneliness" and not think of a dark room?

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-04-30 10:16 PM

hey.. I liked this.. alot.. not my favorite piece by you but it was good.. it's like prose.. but it did show emotion.. i think if you go back and organize it better it will be even better than it is now..

~heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-04-30 10:37 PM

Like Heather said, this would be really, really, good if you organized it a little better...

Also, even though this may sound kinda pushy coming from someone you don't know, I wouldn't advice writing poetry while your mom is yelling at you, trust me, i know, there are some MAJOR things she can take away from you

Very interesting though, glad you found a way to vent and also add be creative

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pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

3 posted 2006-05-01 08:16 PM

yeaa let it all out
needs oragnizing like the above said
but i rly liked the idea
keep up the great work <3

~nora

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx

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