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We All Fall Down |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! 
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Don't forget the pretty face With the pretty dress And the pretty lace Lost in thought Drowned in guilt You just watched the lies that built Untill we all fall down Untill we all fall down |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow.. that's all I can say.... I actually understood this.. maybe not what you meant it to be.. but I think poetry is what each reader sees in it compared to what the author was meaning.. that's what makes it art.. this was a great piece.. you said so much in such a few lines.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, I really liked this, maybe a little short, but who cares! Well, I do sort of, I kind of like the longer poems, but I think this stands good on it's own... If you don't mind me asking, i'd kind of like to know what inspired you to write this? Like Heather said, the author and the reader each have different ideas when they read something, I know what my idea is on this, but i'd like to hear what you were thinking... I know that i've only read one of your posts so far, but i can't wait to read more, each one i have read is amazing! Keep up the good writes  @-->--- |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
Hey you guys, thanx for the great stuff your saying about my stuff. I never really let other people read it.there for I havent heard that many complaments exept for the same people over and over telling me that its good or okay The real insperation for this is just that i had a couple of lines running through my head and I had to put them to lyric so thats that i guess |
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