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blitz
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since 2006-04-26
Posts 19


0 posted 2006-04-26 03:52 PM


tears fall down my cheeks
as i start to think
i know i lost you
i know you cared
but the only thing i desire
to to be near you
i swear i will be at your side
and never leave so long as i live
and its for the thought of seeing you again
that i stay focused
I'll tell you know my heart aches
as you shake
i want to hold you tight
but i cant not even during the dead of night
i watched you cry
as you tell me not to Sure
tears fill your eyes
and your praying it was lies
i look away hiding my tears
never showing my tears
you beg and plead with me not to go
but i cant hold on not any more
i lean to you for a kiss
you cry and i tell you how much i will miss
and how much i will love you
even though i am gone.


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sins_and_tragedies
Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41
england
1 posted 2006-04-26 04:00 PM


omg smiles, that was absolutly wicked i really really liked that one i thought about as i read it how real it was it was like my mind was being read on how i felt well done x
stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-04-26 11:00 PM


Omgosh! This was an awesome poem, i loved the whole thing.

You had like one error i think, where in the poem it says, "to to", i don't know if you saw that or not... I think stanzas would be kewl in this also, but to each his/her own.

Btw, Welcome to pip also!

I can't wait to see more of your posts

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curiouse
Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
3 posted 2006-04-27 09:11 AM


hey blitz, fria here.i am so glad you joined and a fantastic poem you decided to post. yay, welcome and keep posting!
smiles,
me!

i'm looking for you...always...

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