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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
Deep breath Why does your life hit you like a train? At once! Within seconds your in so much pain. Why, one minute, does everyone love you, and the next hate you? Why do i feel so alone? Why don't i let my feelings be shown? Why do others make you feel like u just want to die? Because all they do is make you cry. So i close my eyes, find my own special place and drift away. But when i open them i'm back in this unforgiving world, one that is here to stay. |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
i can relate to this poem i sometimes feel like this i really like your poems it encouraged me to join that the thought of anyone being able to do then why couldnt i? is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
yeah true i'm glad you joinde so welcome and thankyou i find that this help me express wht i'm feeling in a good way, smiles, me! i'm looking for you...always... |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey curiouse, Wow... I haven't posted on anything from you for awhile, hope you're not having a creative slump  So, on this poem i didn't think it was your best, but i did like it, cause i can relate to the part where it talks about feeling alone, and not letting people see your emotions. I guess the only thing i didn't like about this was the ending, i felt it didn't really wrap up the poem, it left a lot hanging. So, i think you could have done a little better job on that, but what do i know? Nothing! lol... Hope to see more from you though, i miss reading your stuffs @-->--- |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
Why does your life hit you like a train? At once! Within seconds your in so much pain. ahhh i loved that to peices!!! great job keep up the great work <3 ~nora your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx |
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Sweetpali08 Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40 |
Hey. This topic caught my attention. So i had to create a screen name and tell you that this is a wonderful poem... I LOVED IT SOO MUCH........... |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
aww thanks it's much apprciated, smiles, curiouse |
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