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cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

0 posted 2006-04-23 09:18 PM

Why does it have to end?
Why do you ask?
You should know the reason, but you blame me for the past.
I don't care anymore! Guys are all jurks that's all i have to say!
I told you before, I'm not the kind of girl that cares thatmuch about anything.
If it were up to me and not God, I would of killed myself a long time ago so I don't have to be with you.
You broke my heart with all those lies!
But I guess I wasn't worth it enough, Because you had the choice to stop your habbit or you would lose me.
I guess you chosed smoking over me.
Which is kind of pathedic since you can't make out with a cigarette with out burning your tongue on it or choking on it.
But that's just my point of view.
It doesn't matter to you anyways since we are through.
I'm sorry baby it had to come to this, but we're through.

This is to a guy that i loved but he just couldn't see me through so i just had to liet him go. But don't get me wrong i love him to death.

cherrys_rule

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-04-23 09:44 PM

So Cherry, have you ever made out with a cigarette? lol. Sorry about your break up. This didn't seem to me to have that much of a flow. There was one or two things in there that rhymed. Did you want the whole poem to rhyme? I can see how you can re-word it so that it's all rhyming. Your poem could use some organization.

           Sorry if I sound rude,
                 Jessica

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2006-04-23 10:25 PM

hello. ah. i can see waht you mean, but then again i smoke...so yeah.
its harder for me to relate.
atleast on that note. but i've had to deal with alcoholics and druggies and break up with them for that, but never smoking cigs. but its different for everyone. just be happy he didnt drink all hours of the day or smoke pot or snort coke.
cuz i have to say...thats a lot worse.

and i have to agree with latte on the rhyming. unless you meant for it to be like that. it seemed more of a rant than anything. which i have done many times. so no worries.

hope everything works out.

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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