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Junebug
Junior Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 40
earth

0 posted 2006-04-23 01:30 AM

A tragedy, a calamity
I myself dont know the real me.
Was i pertending then or pertending now,
Just blending in with what surrounds.
Camouflaged in a forest of lies,
Hiding behind someone elses eyes.
Dressing in someone elses clothes,
Just going with whatever flows.
Brainwashed and hypnotized,
Hiding behind a web of lies.
Doing whatever i'm told i should do,
Not knowing what the real me would do.
Pretending to be someone that i'm not,
Who the real me is...I've forgot!

[This message has been edited by Junebug (04-24-2006 02:56 AM).]

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2006-04-23 06:03 PM

wow. this was really good.
i can completely relate. and it flowed really well.

<3

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

2 posted 2006-04-24 01:28 AM

pertending??? pretending??? check spelling

i dont know where but somewhere on tv or something i heard a poem start w/

"A tragedy, a calamity"....

i dunno

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

3 posted 2006-04-24 06:41 PM

It's "pretending". It flows well. I've also heard that somewhere just can't place it....oh well. Bravo.

Jessica

Junebug
Junior Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 40
earth

4 posted 2006-04-24 08:58 PM

ya uh i know how to spell pretending....it just happend that way! and ya i think i heard that too but wasnt sure...oh well

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-04-26 01:52 AM

I liked this a lot! The flow was very good, except towards the end there was a spot that it kind of just lost it...

Yah, i've heard that on tv somewhere also, but hey, it's neat that you can take a line and make a whole new poem!

Good job on this one, i loved the whole thing

@-->---

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

6 posted 2006-05-05 12:51 PM

yea..hmm...sumwhere i just dont know where
but like stargal said its cool how u can take 1 line from it and make a whole new poem
awesome job keep it up

~nora<3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD!

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