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kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2006-04-22 01:44 AM



i try to think of tomorrow.
instead of yesterday,
but maybe ive got it all wrong.
maybe i should stay.
right where i am.
so that i dont fall.
just stay inside this shell
trapped inside this wall.
its safer in here.
i dont want anyone in.
dont try and break these walls down.
it would be a sin.
to tempt me again.
you are one of the few
who have gotten close.
you are one of the few.
you tempt me the most.
not that you care.
your were just in it for a ride.
and dont contradict yourself
i already know you lied.

© Copyright 2006 Karissa - All Rights Reserved
Junebug
Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40
earth
1 posted 2006-04-23 01:32 AM


WOW! that one like totally rocks too..lol your really good! i wish i could write like that! you totally rock!
I <3 your poems! lol


<3 Donna

tearsoflove13762
Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
2 posted 2006-04-24 01:18 AM


love the concept but i think one of these lines shouldnt be in there
"it would be a sin.
to tempt me again."

both just dont fit...
but i love everything u write in the end!

SENIOR 06'

aol sn- tearsoflove13762

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