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Teen Poetry #7

TO A LOST FRIEND

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

0 posted 2006-04-19 07:41 AM

The differences tht have surfaced,
So inevitable do they seem,
We could not take up together,
What we always dreamed,
Time dint allowed us to smile,
Time dint allow us to frown,
And all confidence shattered and rebuilt,
Today also.....
When dark night fall
And stillness fills my heart,
Yours thoughts come rushing,
Veiled with warmth,asked me
Why we ever apart......
But i .....
I ve no answers,
Then a prayer rises,
Let our friendship lie in the hands of eternity,
May be ...
We r lost friends
stil dopin

Love me for who i m

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-04-19 11:12 AM

I really like this, I can't really explain it, it's like what me and my friend are going through, except were not going through this?!?! Omgosh, i'm so confused

This is a really good poem, spelling is kinda wierd, but that's not that important, i got your general drift...

Umm, stanzas maybe? idk on that either, i kind of like it how it is, but i think there is room for improvment, a little bit of polish.

Wow... this isn't very helpful, umm... Nice poem, please post more?!

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intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

2 posted 2006-04-20 08:15 AM

thanks stargal... i agree to u that the poem needs to be polished, but when i write i dont look at spelling, i concentrate more on what my mind has and are my hands able to pen it down..

Love me for who i m

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