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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I have no idea what to name this, so would ya'll give me some suggestions? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ All alone, or so it seems In the mind of endless dreams Sorrow calls that lonely wretch While pain fills those empty days All alone, lost in remembering… In this place there are no thoughts of pleasant things Nor lovely dreams of beautiful things “How did you get there?” you could ask But there’s no reason for you to do that For she’s locked inside her very own past… Her eyes are open, her face is clear There’s no emotion there Nothing can touch her, cause she can’t feel At times I wonder if she’s even real But I know she’s there… I can hear her thoughts inside my head Wishing that she could just be dead She’s stuck in this place that has no name No way to get out, no way to be free Living her life in mindless agony… @-->--- |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I dunno. Some girl or that girl or somehthing. Sorry I'm not much help. Nice write. I dunno why no one has posted on it yet. Jessica |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
well i reallyliked the poem. but i have no idea what to name it! |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I liked this poem very much..probably one of my favorite by you so good job.  about the name.. when I read it I was thinking "lost" or somewhere along the lines of "lost in herself" or "lost within herself" I don't know.. that's just what came to mind.. maybe... maybe not.. just a suggestion.. great poem ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Peach Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33 |
good write...I like the last two words "mindless agony"...maybe you could title it that, it seems intriguing. If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything. |
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mgoodman1989 Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93Iowa, USA |
I like the name lost... it describes how you feel when you are lost... Nice write stargal... Michelle |
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Junebug Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40earth |
Uh i like "lost within herself"! and uh..the poem is absolutly awesome! |
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mariae Member
since 2006-04-24
Posts 54Denmark, Europe |
Like it, like the rest :-) And like some of the others there is something about the word lost..."Lost in life" is the feeling I get when I read it. |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
mindless agony's a good name awesome write keep it up ~nora<3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD! |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
stuck SENIOR 06' |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, Thanks fer all the ideas everyone! I was thinkin, since i like all of your ideas that maybe the name will be, "lost within mindless agony", not 100% sure on that yet though... Once again though, thanks fer posting replies  @-->--- |
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