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acid_tears_i_cry
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since 2005-11-25
Posts 24
United States, UT

0 posted 2006-04-11 11:43 AM



The morning light has come,
so I flee from the dark
You keep me holding on,
you hold the key to my heart. and Im walking in reason but Im lost in my soul,
Trying to let my heart take control
and Im sailing the waters...sailing into my dreams and you are the waves of the sea.
   and Im walking in reason
but I'm lost in my soul...trying to let my heart take control
and Im sailing the waters...sailing into my dreams and you are the waves...oh you are the waves...and you are the waves of the sea.
          Written By: Malinda Peterson
This is a song I wrote for my ex bf Isaac...Hope you enjoy.

Can you read the word "loneliness" and not think of a dark room?

© Copyright 2006 Malinda C. Peterson - All Rights Reserved
curiouse
Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
1 posted 2006-04-11 11:45 AM


WONDERFULL....CURIOUSE

i'm looking for you...always...

electricxheart
Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.
2 posted 2006-04-11 01:46 PM


'and Im walking in reason but
Im lost in my soul,
Trying to let my heart take control'

beautiful!
please keep writing.

--kelly

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-04-11 06:54 PM


Hi,

I really enjoyed this poem, just the wording in it was so very beautiful!
The only think I dislike is the set up, I believe that the words are all in the correct places, just you need to … like stanzas is what I’m getting at I believe. Stanzas would be awesome.

I don’t know much about songs, but this is amazing!

The morning light has come,
So I flee from the dark
You keep me holding on,
You hold the key to my heart.


Beautiful wording right there, good job

Hope to see more soon!


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