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Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!

0 posted 2006-04-09 02:48 AM



I feel like a stone just lying out in the blistering cold cant feel nothingnot even when people kick you like a ball


just out side with nothing but a little pebble beside me looking up at the big blue sky above me
nothing to live in this world for
not like someone is going to pick me up and say what are you all the way down there for?


no one is going to come along and reach out a hand for me to hold on to
even if they did I would not waist my time I have been let go of to many times


but maybe over time I will gain my trust back and find the good things in life and live it to the full like all the other people do!!!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

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1 posted 2006-04-09 01:09 PM


Deep. Its good that you can let  your emotions out. Now I'm gonna feel bad for doing this but oh well. Your poem needs to be a bit more organized. Make the lines and the stanzas  neater. Sorry if any of that sounded rude.

                  Jessica

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