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sometimesitslonely
Junior Member
since 2005-12-27
Posts 41
USA

0 posted 2006-04-05 07:33 PM


How could it
    ....fade...

just drift from my hands
and shrivel away like
        -sand-

Complete silence in your looks,
but what would you have to say
how you broke my
(heart)
how you stole my
(dreams)

Never, after all these years
did I forgive you,
so when I look at you, and see YOU
glaring at me with that same smile,
that same F.A.K.E smile...

I just don't

---Care---
about it
***Any*** more...

This smile is fake,
These tears aren't.

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aliway
Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185
With in your eyes
1 posted 2006-04-05 07:49 PM


Wonderful poem
Great work

*leah

latteaddict213
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since 2006-02-17
Posts 523
Colorado
2 posted 2006-04-08 07:02 PM


Yeah. Nice work. Nothing really to constructively critiqe.

               Jessica

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