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sometimesitslonely
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since 2005-12-27
Posts 41
USA

0 posted 2006-04-04 08:50 PM


I feel so broken
Life is very cold now,
My guitar plays the same song,
My fingers are now numb.

I am extremely tired
Life is on repeat,
I hear your voice-
I keep falling…

**What** would you do,
Without my love
Probably nothing at all
So unwillingly it is.

((Tomorrow)) is years away from now,
So let’s relax for a moment,
Like there’s nothing between us,
But I’m sure there always will be.

This smile is fake,
These tears aren't.

© Copyright 2006 sometimesitslonely - All Rights Reserved
bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14
Posts 533

1 posted 2006-04-04 08:52 PM


kinda confusing...
curiouse
Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
2 posted 2006-04-05 08:07 AM


i love it.
yes it could be a little confusing but everyone can infere it the way they want.
well done,keep posting.
curiouse

Curioustity is a fine gift...

aliway
Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185
With in your eyes
3 posted 2006-04-05 08:06 PM


Great poem
I agree with curiouse.
Nice work

*leah

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since 2006-02-17
Posts 523
Colorado
4 posted 2006-04-08 06:51 PM


It is a little confusing. Maybe you could clear that up? it was good and would be better if it made more sence.

                     Jessica

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