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Teen Poetry #7

'Cause It's Love

xox.ice.cream.lover.xox
Junior Member

since 2006-01-07

Posts 20
Canada

0 posted 2006-03-31 10:29 PM

you claim to love me
but really, is it true?
you say it's for ever
and i really wanna believe u.

no complications,
just you and me.
no doubts, no lies,
that's just a fantasy.

she's not over u.
this i'm sure u know
ur not over her.
but im not losing hope

maybe they're all lies
that i think,say,blurt...
'cause it's love.
and yea, it hurts.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-03-31 11:32 PM

Hey,

I really like this poem, and may I say thank you for breaking it down into stanzas, it makes it so much easier for me to read!

Umm, I’m not really sure I understand these lines,

“maybe they’re all lies
that I think, say, blurt…”

I mean I understand them, I just do not think they tie in well with the ending.
Another thing, you might want to spell check your poems before you post them, it also helps the reader so they do not have to stop and decipher what you’re trying to say. On this poem it was pretty easy to tell, but that’s just so you know, I personally like to use Microsoft Word before I post my poems.

Great poem though, I like the second stanza a lot!

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stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-04-01 11:29 PM

I'm going to post on this real fast to get it back to the top of the list, i hope more people see your poem and offer inputs