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Cherishable_Baybee
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0 posted 2006-03-31 06:03 PM


Don’t Underestimate Me
By: Cherishable_Baybee

Before when people use to walk pass me
I use to look down to the ground
So lost and confused
Trying to figure out how I was
And how much my life was changed
Since I walked away from my family
I lacked a great deal of confidence
And self-respect
People said I was going to be unsuccessful
Ugly, and lonesome
Doomed to be a doormat for people to step on
But they always underestimated me
Now, they fear me
They fear my beauty, my self-confidence, and my happiness
Now when they walk pass me they look down to the ground
While I look them in eye
With happiness and joy
I did not treat them the way they treated me
I showed them curtsy and hospitality
I did not break into a historical laugh when they pass by
I did not show them disrespect
Although they underestimated my power
I did not return them to favor
Now they learn their lesson
To never underestimate people
Whether people are old or young
Man or Woman
You should never underestimate the power of a human being
Because it funny how karma can bite you right back


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stargal
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1 posted 2006-04-01 12:17 PM


This is an amazing poem!


I was wondering if you would consider stanzas? It helps the reader if there are some.


I really liked the first few lines! Thank you so much for sharing.

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2 posted 2006-04-01 11:10 PM


"Whether people are old or young
Man or Woman
You should never underestimate the power of a human being
Because it funny how karma can bite you right back"


This part made me smile becuase it is so true.  I love this poem so much and the whole "Don't Underestimate Me" thing, because this is how I feel a lot of the time too.
Awesome job!

~Alli~

Cherishable_Baybee
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3 posted 2006-04-02 06:21 PM


thanks once again guys i just tell it the way it is lol
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4 posted 2006-04-08 09:18 PM


Stanzas would be good for this. Wonderful write. Its flows well.

                  Jessica

curiouse
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5 posted 2006-04-12 10:36 AM


that was absoloutly mind blowing i loved it!
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dramaticaddict
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6 posted 2006-04-13 08:52 PM


wow...

i really loved your poem

i actually have written one with the same title,
but i like your actual poem better

incredibleee

<3cassie.
Cherishable_Baybee
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7 posted 2006-04-16 06:48 PM


thanks again guys next time ill try to write stanzaic form =D
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