saturday lunch (i n e e d you so much)

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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2006-03-31 02:24 PM

words caught within my throat
his eyes intently waiting
always waiting
we’re always waiting

for nothing
for something

he doesn’t know
how badly
the word vomit burns
my heart
dying to reach out
and touch
just [a part]
of his soul
who is he within my presence?
for i am surely not myself
and he begs
he pleads
for me to
let this pride go
to show
to show

my battle wounds
he wants to see
to touch
to prove
how alive i really am
how beautiful i can be…

please…
please…
he said believe, kelly
you need to believe
you need to speak
you need to show
you need to let go

i desire this, i desire him
but how could he SEE past these weaknesses?
his heart made of something p.u.r.e
but again and again
i wind up bleeding on the floor
he asks
he asks
…and i could never give when
…so many have taken this from me

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-03-31 02:49 PM

Wow! I like this a lot, and yet I don’t understand it at all…
I really like the first stanza though, and I feel like there is so much emotion in this poem, the whole poem is alive with emotions! Alive with emotions, that kind of sounds odd? But I feel like this poem, something in this poem touches me? I’m not sure what it is, this poem confused me a lot, but I still enjoyed it.

I like this part a lot,

“please…
please…
he said believe, kelly
you need to believe
you need to speak
you need to show
you need to let go”

something about this part really speaks to me… could you tell me what you mean by “Saturday lunch”?

Good job, I’m not sure what you did, or how you did it, but this is an amazing poem!

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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

2 posted 2006-03-31 06:07 PM

thanks so much for the comment! a little background for the poem: i named this poem saturday lunch because this boy that i met a few months ago, we go out to lunch sometimes on saturdays and we're really starting to have a connection. the only thing is i can be very shy about sharing my emotions with people, especially him. he's picked up on this weakness of mine and is trying to help me to express more of who i am as a person to him as well as to other people.

hope this explanation has helped!
--kelly

curiouse
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since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england