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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
My friend and I dreamed of being sisters saying what if but always wonting it as is but nothing lasts for ever defiantly not happiness the bad comes in sadness comes to being all comes to an end her father ran away died in the snow my parents divorced mothers married fathers dating in our greatest of time of need we were no where to be seen no talking between we were like strangers in a different being we were the closest of friends been that way for 7 years straight but in the blink of an eye a friendship can die I became distant she to busy to play as they say nature take its place [This message has been edited by aliway (03-27-2006 05:47 PM).] |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
good but check for spelling errors. and on the line "in are greatest of time of need " it would be "our" not "are" just some thoughts. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
This is a great poem! And like he/she said, check for spelling errors, there are a few. I seem to be saying this on all the poems I read but… I can really relate to your poem! One of my old friends and I became like this, never really gotten back together but I still hope  Thanks for sharing this poem… I think a lot of people will relate @-->--- |
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