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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
I wrote this song or poem i don't know what it is today because i have a lot of emotions inside of me . it's my first text i've ever written so don't judge too hard.here it goes....... Hello world Is anyone there? Should I open the light or is it already on? Do I need to go or should I stay a while longer. Hello world I am here I have feelings too I am me, you are you It seems that everyone keeps on walking away from me It seems that you always end up walking away from me Am I too much or am I not enough Should I just be me or do I need to change I want to let go of myself and reach out to you. But how can I feel your hand, How can I touch your eyes if your not even there? Did I imagine you or did I imagine what you could have been Did I want you or did I want what you could have been Did I love you or did I love what you could have been. I need to go now, I don’t want to stay any longer I don’t want to be here any longer I want to go now I never want to come back here again. Don’t come searching after me I know you won’t cause I’ll come back again I’ll come back again I’ll come back again I want to say I’m sorry. I’m sorry to myself. Because I want you more than I want myself But I cannot have you; you can not have me anymore. Hello world Is anyone there? Should I open the light or is it already on? Do I need to go or should I stay a while longer. Hello world I am here and I have feelings too I am me, you are you Hello world Why are you here? Leave me now, or do I need to leave you? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! This is an amazing poem. Really deep, lots of emotion in it! I was a little confused on a few lines, like i was thinking, "did he/she really mean to use that word", so that's just a thought. I loved how you put so many emotions into this poem though! Good job Keep writing~ @-->--- |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
i am a girl and only in my teen so unfortunately i am not so familiar with EVERY word in the dictionary oh and why bits were you confused on, maybe i could enlighten you, thanks for your comment though, curiouse |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
again, this one has already been posted in open...please read the guidelines regarding double postings...this is the thrid one, I have emailed you already regarding this so I am closing this one too. |
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