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Teen Poetry #7

Sober Eyes

sometimesitslonely
Junior Member

since 2005-12-27

Posts 41
USA

0 posted 2006-03-23 06:49 PM

Sober eyes,
aren't filled with lies,
no hazy cries,
or the walks of lines.

Sober eyes,
fill a void,
run and hide,
or face the truth.

Sober eyes,
of cheating disguise,
standing of time,
and holding of long drives.

Sober eyes,
how I long,
no more sadness,
no more fear.

This smile is fake,
These tears aren't.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-03-23 10:43 PM

*speachless*

wow

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-03-24 12:41 PM

Umm, i liked the general idea but it is a little bit confusing! Either that or it's just me... like the "sober eyes, aren't filled with lies, no hazy cries, or the walks of lines", what's the walks of lines mean in this? I found that what i thought in most of the stanzas was the first half made sense to me the rest didn't :S

I liked the title of this though, really fit. I can never seem to find the right title for poems

Good job!

@-->---

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2006-03-24 06:03 PM

Nice write. I agree I don't totally understand the point you were trying to make, but that's why you wrote the poem because it means something to you.
Keep up the good work.

~Alli~

BlackEyedBueaty07
Junior Member

since 2006-04-05

Posts 27
rittman, ohio

4 posted 2006-04-07 05:04 PM

wow that was very good!! I tottaly understand this poem!! its amazing! wow!

-Kerry-

new poem of mine-- 'Cant sleep'

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

5 posted 2006-04-07 05:06 PM

well i loved it i can relate to it right now.
i needed this
curiouse

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

6 posted 2006-04-12 10:22 PM

I don't understand it but it’s very good

*Leah

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