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ShelbyLynn13
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0 posted 2006-03-23 11:00 AM



are we friends?
or did that change?
i know she probably thinks she is better then me but why cant we still be friends.
i know sometimes i can come off a little strong but hey, cant we still be friends.
things are differant your just starting middle school and im finishing it! but whats the differance?
everything i thought would happen to us did!
why is our friendship falling apart?
all i ever wanted was to be your friend and now there is nothhing left but a few old e-mails!
i will always try to remember you!
even though you didn't know that this was happening between us, catch it know it and fix it!
BEFORE IT IS TOO LATE!!!!!!!!

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every one is special in their own  way!!!

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ShelbyLynn13
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1 posted 2006-03-23 11:02 AM


tell me what you honestly think because yoou guys dont seem to like my poems very much anyway!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

stargal
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2 posted 2006-03-23 11:28 AM


Umm... It was a bit dramatic? With a lot of ! in it. I liked how you are saying you need to fix friendships before it's to late.
All in all it enjoyed this poem

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curiouse
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3 posted 2006-03-23 12:32 PM


i think it is fantastic. i am going through the same thing with my friend as well but i wrote my poem a little less blunt and more open so everyone can intereperate it in any way they want. as for the meaning of the poem, it describes my situation and my advice is not to take it too much to heart as lots of things happen in our lives and it will pass. hope so, anyway
hugs

ShelbyLynn13
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4 posted 2006-03-23 02:20 PM


cool, thanx for the comments but stargal why are you comparing my poem with yours we are 2 differant people! but thanx for the comment!


every one is special in their own  way!!!

[This message has been edited by ShelbyLynn13 (03-24-2006 11:20 AM).]

stargal
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5 posted 2006-03-23 05:47 PM


I'm sorry? I was NOT comparing my poems with yours. I do know we are different people.
I have no idea where you got this "idea", i'm comparing my stuff with yours.

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6 posted 2006-03-23 06:19 PM


I thought this poem was excellent Shelby.  Hope you'll post more poems soon!

~Alli~

ShelbyLynn13
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7 posted 2006-03-24 11:19 AM


im sorry stargal i meant someone else not you! sorry for the mix up and misspelling your name!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

curiouse
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8 posted 2006-04-02 08:46 AM


shelbylynn13 i was not comparing your poems with my own i was just telling you how i write mine any way i won't reply to your poems in future,if you are going to get so touchy !
stargal
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9 posted 2006-04-02 04:43 PM


Umm.. i accept your apology Shelbylynn?

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10 posted 2006-04-02 07:29 PM


hey ummm nice write? hmmmm i wonder if i should ask this..... oh well even if i shouldn't i'm gunna ask anyways, who is this about?


             Jessica

ShelbyLynn13
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11 posted 2006-04-05 05:40 PM


well its about this girl she can be nice but sometimes i just feel out of place with her and her family. and she seems perfect! she is skinny and pretty and she has the perfect life in my eyes but you know who she is!

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latteaddict213
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12 posted 2006-04-08 08:59 PM


Not really. Who is it? What are her initials? or her name?

                  Jessica

aliway
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13 posted 2006-04-19 11:30 PM


I think it’s cool. its nice you want to work it out with your freind

*leah

ShelbyLynn13
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14 posted 2006-04-20 08:16 PM


her initials are JMS

every one is special in their own  way!!!

musicalfusion
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15 posted 2006-04-21 03:38 PM


hi like the poem you the only criticism is the last line its already affective without the capitals so i dont think you needed to put them in but apart from that its brill hope to see more from you

*****Rachel*****

ShelbyLynn13
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16 posted 2006-04-21 05:18 PM


thanx..... i think?

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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