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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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0 posted 2006-03-13 06:34 PM


You’re not so tough
You’re not so big
You’re nothing but a little kid

But for all your front
You can’t see
That you’re just hiding
From the person you could be

Don’t just laugh
You know it’s true
You’re not who you should be

So don’t hide
Behind your mind
Don’t let it win
Cause you’re life should begin

But while you hide
Inside yourself
You’re missing out
On your own life…

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Well.... Jj, you name it, k?

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© Copyright 2006 stargal - All Rights Reserved
Sweet.Nia
New Member
since 2006-03-13
Posts 2

1 posted 2006-03-13 06:54 PM


Fun! I get to name a poem...

uhh... what should i name it?

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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2 posted 2006-03-13 06:55 PM


0mgosh you joined!


Sweet.Nia
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since 2006-03-13
Posts 2

3 posted 2006-03-13 07:02 PM


Duhh! Couldn't let you have all the fun

Btw, guess whose email address i have?

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
4 posted 2006-03-13 07:04 PM


You didn't!

Did you?

Get on yahoo

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the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
5 posted 2006-03-14 05:05 PM


Hey,

Well I can see that no one's really said anything about your poem.. It was really great.. I didn't really understand the message is was trying to say but still nice write.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

*Alli4000*
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6 posted 2006-03-14 06:15 PM


Very nice write.  Enjoyed it.

~Alli~

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
7 posted 2006-03-14 06:46 PM


Hey Heather,

Thank you for posting. As for the meaning of the poem, it doesn't really have any like you said! Mostly when i wrote this i was just mad at myself... mumbling to myself... Nothing really important.

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Artofmark
Junior Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 41

8 posted 2006-08-01 11:57 AM


I really like the concept of this poem, well written, I just think the last stanza could be a little stronger, but in all excellent read
pen&paper
Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513

9 posted 2006-08-01 02:12 PM


hey! Loved it!
i can Totally relate because I had a friend who was on drugs and these are the things I said to her.


THis totally rocked!

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
10 posted 2006-08-01 02:15 PM


Mmm... Thanks, I was kind of hoping this poem would remained buried in the forum where no one could see it, not one of my favorites... Yet, i'm glad you all liked it...

Thanks for the comments, I appreciate them a lot

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cherrys_rule
Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

11 posted 2006-08-10 06:44 PM


yeah you can't really do that on pip lol, well I thought your poem was very good. I really enjoyed it. Hope to see more.
The Shadow in Blue
Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493
EL, Michigan
12 posted 2006-08-12 06:28 PM


Remain buried. Why that would be a shame. I like the simple message of living life to the fullest. Well written and trés true.

~J.

buttercupbaby
Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400
outside in the rain
13 posted 2006-08-13 06:59 AM


wait...stargal's poetry remain burried?
HA!
honestly, how could that actually happen? exactly, its impossible! so, i liked this. it was nice, not your best, as you said, but, it was nice. i really liked it..

-missy

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
14 posted 2006-08-17 12:17 PM


lol!~ Thanks buttercupbaby, the shadow in blue, and cherrys_rule, ya'll are waayy to kind. Yet, thanks for taking the time to read/post

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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