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mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

0 posted 2006-03-12 09:17 AM

Loving you
was the best
my heart explodes
inside my chest

You made me happy
you made me smile
I almost thought
you'd stay awhile

I was blind
I couldn't see
it's always her
and never me

Loving you
was a mistake
it almost caused
my heart to break

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-03-12 11:06 AM

Woah! thats

. nice write

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-03-12 02:21 PM

That was awesome. I loved the point of view keep it up..

~HEather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

sometimesitslonely
Junior Member

since 2005-12-27

Posts 41
USA

3 posted 2006-03-12 03:36 PM

I've never read something so beautiful in my life. It was amazingly bittersweet.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-03-12 04:34 PM

Hey Mgoodman!

Let me tell you, if my poetry was even half as good as what you right i would be braggin' it all over the place

Let me just say your one poet going in my library.

I really like how you got the flow in this poem! every stanza fits, every word belongs ...

Keep up the good writes

@-->---

John O'Driscoll
Junior Member

since 2006-03-13

Posts 43
Sandy, Utah

5 posted 2006-03-13 11:00 AM

This poem rocked my world. I know its about liking a guy, but it really captured all my feelings about a very lost and very confusing love. So...uhhh...thanks!

Sincerely

John O'Driscoll

True happiness is found after you think you have irretrievably lost it

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

6 posted 2006-03-14 06:24 PM

thanks a bunch for reading my poem.. really glad you guys enjoyed it...

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

7 posted 2006-03-14 06:28 PM

Oh, wow this poem is so amazing. I can relate to it so much. I hope you'll continue writing more and post them!

~Alli~

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

8 posted 2006-04-07 05:12 PM

Thanks everyone for the awesome Posts!!!

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

9 posted 2006-04-12 10:26 PM

Lovely poem and yet sad. You’re a great writer!!

*Leah

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