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Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!

0 posted 2006-03-10 01:00 AM



Im lying here crying
just wondering what's next
if I should go back to that school which was the best
maybe I should pray or is that the right way?

trying to see that day when all my fears will just fly away
I'v had enough of just standing here giving way
I sit in my room just daydreaming that maybe i'll get this day
and hoping its not that far away
wishing that the next day I could just hide away


away from fears
away from pain
away from this life...that i cannot stand
for just one day
but hay...like that's ever going to happen anyway!
I live my life everyday like a dream that's fading away
but still hoping, hoping that maybe...maybe i'll get this day!!!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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1 posted 2006-03-10 12:49 PM


Hey,

I like this poem a lot, but i'm not quite sure what you mean about "this day", can you enlighten this poor fool?

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Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!
2 posted 2006-03-10 05:19 PM


trying to see THAT DAY when all my fears will just fly away
I'v had enough of just standing here giving way
I sit in my room just daydreaming that maybe i'll get THIS DAY and hoping its not that far away

this is what i mean about "this day" do you get me now? lol thanks for replying

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

latteaddict213
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3 posted 2006-03-10 05:20 PM


i think that you used the wrong type of hey,hay. you used the hay when i think that you ment it to be hey. thats just what i think. nice work. enjoyed reading it

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!
4 posted 2006-03-10 09:31 PM


Oh hey hey yeah umm over here we use both ways even if hay means what you give a horse sorry if that confused you maybe i should change it ... not on this one coz its been a day since i sent it in

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Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

latteaddict213
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5 posted 2006-03-11 12:20 PM


how is the weather in "the middle of my mind"?

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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