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Teen Poetry #7

Fortunate Times

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-03-05 04:20 PM

Such fortune is bestowed up on me,
To have thee in my arms tonight,
Of all the wealth in the world,
I eye you with my precious lust,

Fixated on you as if you are a dream,
This has no end in sight,
Only heaven bound love is spring forth,
From your lips that are of angelic kind,

Blessed am I to be in your company,
Only if you found me before my birth,
Before the days I was without you,
So colorless they were without your rainbow,

Now that we are here, let us leave this place,
Take me to your heavens,
In your heart where many have tried to enter,
Let me see what you hide beneath that devilish smile,

Heaven help me for I have sinned,
Learned to love you and not let you go,
This madness of love has me in your trance,
From which springs our eternal romance.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-03-06 08:56 PM

"Heaven help me for I have sinned,
Learned to love you and not let you go,
This madness of love has me in your trance,
From which springs our eternal romance."

LOVE the ending! the whole poem flows very well.

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-03-07 07:16 PM

It’s interesting? I’m not quite sure I like it… no! Please do not get me wrong, I am not trying to bash what you’ve wrote! I just think I might need a little longer to get used to it.

I feel like sometimes your talking about something and than u say one word that throws me completely off.
Maybe you jump around to much for my tastes? I’m not sure…

Thanks for sharing your poem with me though.

I will have to think of it some more.

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