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byski
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0 posted 2006-03-03 07:50 PM


I’m on a night rampage with friends
We stay out hoodlums till the end
We party until who knows when
And we crash to do it again

You all know where I have been
And if u haven’t you soon will see
Or maybe too much enjoyed the scene
And can’t remember the good times with me

So you call the cops and end our fun
But we didn’t mean to hurt anyone
They just didn’t remember where they came from
And fit in until they were undone

Death

I’m sorry, I truly am.
I see what you meant
Those days were wasted
Can’t get them back
For all our life was spent

Unorthodox mabey, but I grow on you.

© Copyright 2006 byski - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
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1 posted 2006-03-03 09:52 PM


This was awesome. I loved the second and last stanzas... great job..



~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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2 posted 2006-03-03 10:15 PM


Iliked it all. wonderful

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

ShelbyLynn13
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since 2006-02-15
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3 posted 2006-03-04 04:52 PM


thats is a really touching poem

every one is special in their own  way!!!

Free_Spirit07
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4 posted 2006-03-04 05:17 PM


Nice work...i did'nt think the ryming was that great at first but pulled it together at the end! i just thought i might say that - lol but altogether awesome poem

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

byski
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since 2006-01-26
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Alberta, Canada
5 posted 2006-03-05 01:54 PM


Thanks for the warm responce. It was kinda hard to spit it out, I just wrote without stopping. Dedicated to my friend who I will see soon. It reminds me to live life like he did and that what we think are serious problems are not really in the end compared to that.
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