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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

0 posted 2006-03-01 05:43 PM

I can hear it day and night,
I see it in my dreams,
this burden on my shoulder,
there forever, so it seems.
I remember what was said,
the actions that occured,
I wanted to give up,
a path with vision blurred.
The memories stay with me,
and some I wish I could forget,
but I'd have to erase all of them,
and I know I'd soon regret.
I know that it's all wrong,
this game of sad pretend,
but the only thing I want from it,
is a quick and sudden end.
I can't hold out on my own,
without a shoulder to lean,
so right now I'm all alone,
and exception to "No 'I' in team.
I won't cry for it doesn't matter,
because no one else can hear...
I'll just wait til I can match,
a shoulder with a tear.

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

[This message has been edited by the_girl_next_door (03-01-2006 10:15 PM).]

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

1 posted 2006-03-01 09:41 PM

but the only thing I want from it,
is a quick and sudden end.
I can't hold out on my own,
without a shoulder to lean,
so right now I'm all alone,
and exception to "No 'I' in team.
I won't cry for it doesn't matter,
because no one else can hear...
I'll just wait til I can match,
a shoulder with a tear.

i can so relate to this very very well....it seems like just yeah the poem said it all

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

2 posted 2006-03-01 10:05 PM

" I know that it's all wrong,
this game of sad pretend,
but the only thing I want from it,
is a quick and sudden end.
I can't hold out on my own,
without a shoulder to lean,
so right now I'm all alone,
and exception to "No 'I' in team.
I won't cry for it doesn't matter,
because no one else can hear...
I'll just wait til I can match,
a shoulder with a tear."

This part just really hit me hard. Wonderful. I think that there was only one misspelling. And thats always good. Nice write

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

3 posted 2006-03-01 10:16 PM

Hey thanks for the replys and again.. the spelling error. I guess I get to typing so fast that I don't even look at the screen. Guess i need to learn to proof read. he he

thanks again

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

4 posted 2006-03-03 07:03 PM

this was beautiful. i can imagine a girl leaning on a shoulder bawling in the end. and throughout the poem i see a girl sitting in her room writing.

idk. this was really good.

*karissa*

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

5 posted 2006-03-03 09:50 PM

thanks Karissa.. now that you mention it.. even I can see it in my head.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

6 posted 2006-03-04 12:43 PM

There is a beautiful flow to this. The rhyming is perfect. I liked this alot.

ShelbyLynn13
Member

since 2006-02-15

Posts 73
US, Colorodo

7 posted 2006-03-04 05:15 PM

wow that is a really neat poem! nice write!

ttyl

every one is special in their own way!!!

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