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Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!

0 posted 2006-02-23 02:50 AM



you'v gone again and left me pain
will I ever figure out your game?


I waited and waited for the day when we would meet, and finish your game
but you won again, and now I got this pain a pain of not knowing how or why you make me cry


every night I wonder how and if i'll ever win your game and how to play
give me a chance and we will start again
give me the dice and i'll roll
your turn now its happening again
your ahead and im your aim


I really don't think I will see you again
so here is my chance to say you sunk my ship it's all in bits
you won your game and im going insane
i'll leave it here till we meet up in the place where God will lead the way!

Goodbye Nick !!!
Im shore we will meet again...

p.s this is bout my brother!

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kissa~rachelle
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1 posted 2006-02-23 05:19 PM


its good. just really confusing. but i like how you incorporated different games into it. like battleship.

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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2 posted 2006-02-23 06:51 PM


I like it i had too read it a few times before I got it . Im sorry about your loss. I reeally like the way you put the gane into you poem. nice write

            Jessica    
              :)

       Where your heart lays
        is where you belong.

Free_Spirit07
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The middle of my mind!
3 posted 2006-02-24 12:12 PM


Oh really? im sorrrrrrryyyyyy umm yh real sorry!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

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