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latteaddict213
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0 posted 2006-02-18 12:46 PM



Love is wonderful,
Love is powerful,
Love is meant to be true.

Love is a tragity,
Love is a mystery,
Love is evil and cruel.


Love is a part of me,
Love is the heart of me,
Love can take you away.


Love can hurt you,
in so many ways.

What is the point of love?

Where your heart lays is where you belong.

© Copyright 2006 Jessica - All Rights Reserved
byski
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1 posted 2006-02-18 12:53 PM


Very well done. But i was kind of dissapointed with the end with the thoughts you are trying to express and the sudden stop in rhythem. It was perfect until that last line, it kinda left me wanting more. But love isnt all that bad, I know itz impossible to see now but u did learn alot and will become a better person because of your loss. Just keep on writing!
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2 posted 2006-02-18 12:53 PM


Jessica~
Welcome to PiP~

'What is the point of love?'

Ahhhh, just to be in it,
for a moment, for eternity, for foreverly ... ahhhh~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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3 posted 2006-02-18 12:56 PM


Thanx you guys.

Where your heart lays is where you belong.

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4 posted 2006-02-18 12:57 PM


Great poem Jessica- keep up the great work and o yea- `~*WeLcOmE tO pIp`~*!!!

XoXo,
XxnoraxX

No ones perfect;just perfect for each other-<3

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5 posted 2006-02-20 11:51 AM


it was okay but when i first read it i was dissapointed because you stole a few lines from ashley simpson's song L.O.V.E.
so just start to write your own words and yoour own lines. but other then that your writing is okay so talk to you later jess!

    shelby

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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6 posted 2006-02-20 12:40 PM


ashley simpsons L.O.V.E.? wow i haven't heard that song in a while.. maybe a few of the line do sound alike.. i dont know i'll have to listen to her cd again
  thanx 4 notifing me though

Where your heart lays is where you belong.

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7 posted 2006-02-20 05:32 PM


your welcome!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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8 posted 2006-03-01 06:00 PM


Love is a part of me,
Love is the heart of me,
Love can take you away.

Hey Jessica,

it's me.. I like this poem but I wish it would've had a little more added to it. I liked how you used simple text but delivered a powerful message. My view is only those in love or have been in love know what the point is and I'm not saying that your not in love if you're doubting what it's for but that somethings not quite write. I am one of those pestimists but Love can be so many different things to so many different people.

Keep up the good work.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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9 posted 2006-03-01 09:53 PM


thanx Heather.

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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10 posted 2006-03-01 10:20 PM


OMG way cute !?! i like it i think its super cute!?! *LOL*

              mal

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11 posted 2006-03-01 10:23 PM


thank you!

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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12 posted 2006-03-02 03:44 AM


the point of love...

all in one sad happy hurting sweet romantic...

anything a man can describe...

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13 posted 2006-03-02 05:50 PM


Uh... thanx

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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14 posted 2006-03-04 05:14 PM


uh duh that is defenitly cute but can use some work around the edges

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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15 posted 2006-03-04 07:10 PM


love is all of these things. and there is no point in it. except to love and be loved in return.
nice write. very.

*karissa*

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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16 posted 2006-03-04 10:41 PM


This is good great work *thumbs up*

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

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17 posted 2006-03-04 10:48 PM


thanx all.
Shelby are you mad at me? you allready told me that earlier. Dont have to rub it
in.
Thanx to the rest of you again

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

ShelbyLynn13
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18 posted 2006-03-23 05:25 PM


what was i rubbing in i didn't say anything the same! dont worry i will make sure i dont write 2 comments on your poems anymore!!!!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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19 posted 2006-03-23 05:31 PM


Hey Jessica,

I'm not sure, but i think this is the first poem of yours i have seen?!?! No, maybe not.. Just haven't seen a lot of yours

This was great, i liked how it was kind of simple. I would agree though, that the ending was kinda :S
ya know?

Good Job though

@-->---

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20 posted 2006-03-23 06:17 PM


Enjoyed this poem very much.  Hope to read more from you soon!

~Alli~

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21 posted 2006-03-23 06:50 PM


shelby: thank you

stargal: i dont think so... maybe...i dunno.

allie:fanx

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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22 posted 2006-04-07 05:28 PM


that was the best poem ive heard today! i saw how many people gave you comments and then i thought 'maybe this poem is very good, or maybe they just have a lot of friends..' lol.  but i think it was both!

-kerry-


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23 posted 2006-04-07 07:48 PM


oh thanx! thats really sweet. the best huh? cool. you just made my day.

                   Jessica

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aliway
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24 posted 2006-04-15 12:40 PM


It’s lovely, great poem
I don’t really like the end of it with “What is the point of love?”
But what do I know.

*leah

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