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ShelbyLynn13
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since 2006-02-15
Posts 73
US, Colorodo

0 posted 2006-02-18 12:59 PM



Why do people abuse animals or other people. or leave them??

dad why did you hit?
why did you not want me and decided to get drunk instead of facing the fact that you were hurting an innocent baby and her mother!!
now you have to go through life knowing your own flesh and blood that you brought into the world you just abandon at the age of 3.
you should be punished for the way you treated me and my mother.
i hope your sorry the way you hurt me and made me wished for the times i wanted my father!!

YOU CLARENCE  CAN GO TO HELL!!!!!!!!!!
and i wouldn't give a crap!!


every one is special in their own  way!!!

[This message has been edited by ShelbyLynn13 (02-19-2006 03:51 PM).]

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byski
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since 2006-01-26
Posts 235
Alberta, Canada
1 posted 2006-02-18 12:35 PM


probly a good idea not to be too specific with names. That one is kind of unique too, but whatever. Its a great way to express emotion with words isnt it? Next time try to use more creativity and originality. Do something you would be proud to show off to everyone, ur mom, ur friends and even people like us who love to find some raw emotion.
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2 posted 2006-02-18 01:41 PM


Yeah you shouldn't use spicific names. A first name is allright but you shouldn't use whole names. i'm so sorry that you didn't have a father growing up but I belive that every thing happens for a reason.

Where your heart lays is where you belong.

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