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acid_tears_i_cry Junior Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 24United States, UT |
Afraid of the dark?...Here me whisper... I can only speak of pain I cause...I can only hold myself down anymore...I can even cry my bloodshed tears of blossoming heart beats...I hide away..i run away...but they always still bind me by there emotional issues...I cant take controle...no matter how many times im first...I cant breathe no matter how many trees I surround...I cant get an "A" no matter how smart I am...I turn to the clock...and close my eyes....Afraid of the dark?...Hear me whisper... Xoxo Mindy xoxo I cant Look at the shade andymore..its become too bright |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
Umm GREAT i like this  keep em coming  x0x0 |
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XxnoraxX Member
since 2006-01-24
Posts 122<3 MA,,,USA <3 |
I think this is great but i think it can flow a little better but other then that- simply amazing! Keep up the great work- XoXo, |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
thats wonderful, but Iagree it could flow a little better. I really like your work and you should persue writing. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
When you post it is usually a good idea to write it up in word first. Just for spell checks because I think you ment "thier emotional issues". But I like it, mabey you should try aranging it differantly to give it some more dynamics. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
Oh yeah, you can and should save it too before you post. |
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