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XxnoraxX
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0 posted 2006-02-13 05:27 PM


Me and my girls are so tight
we have each others backs
forgive and forget when we have a fight

If you hurt one of us
you hurt all of us
its not worth the fuss

So if you mess with me
you mess with fire
but mess with my girls;
and your life expires


XoXo,
XxnoraxX

No ones perfect;just perfect for each other-<3

© Copyright 2006 Nora A. - All Rights Reserved
Stepharoo
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1 posted 2006-02-13 05:29 PM


Haha, this is great... I have the same relationship with my girlfriends. We are so close, you mess with the bull you get the horns... Good job
Stephanie

Free_Spirit07
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2 posted 2006-02-13 11:41 PM


HeHe .... funni im liking it!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07

fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

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3 posted 2006-02-16 03:13 PM


This is a good poem, I like the story behind the words. I might suggest adding to the poem if you could. It felt like, after I read it, that it was missing something. Unless you were going for the 'short' effect, I might try and increase it a several lives. Especially the third line, first stanza. Seems out of place.



~Titus

Belinda
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4 posted 2006-02-16 04:32 PM


wow spot on, that's just like me nd my gals! loL! hehe ! i thought it was good, short nd sweet xD !!

Belinda x x

XxnoraxX
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5 posted 2006-02-16 08:03 PM


Thanks so much for the feeback- your all awesome

XoXo,
XxnoraxX

No ones perfect;just perfect for each other-<3

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6 posted 2006-03-09 02:56 PM


lol! me and all my girls are the same. loved it.

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
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7 posted 2006-03-09 06:36 PM


ha.. I loved this. It was awesome. Keep it up.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

ShelbyLynn13
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8 posted 2006-03-21 10:55 AM


me and my girls are practicly the exact same!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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9 posted 2006-03-21 07:03 PM


Yes, this is the same with my friends.
Keep posting!

~Alli~

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