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Teen Poetry #7

It only takes one Kiss...

littlelauren
Junior Member

since 2005-12-30

Posts 25

0 posted 2006-01-11 05:36 PM

It only takes one kiss
to feel apart of someone
it only takes one kiss
to be done

It onlt takes one kiss
to betray a friend
it only takes one kiss
for a friendship to end

a kiss can destroy a friendship
a kiss can destroy a life
a kiss can destroy old feelings
a kiss can destroy a knife

I want a kiss so bad
from him
but from my bestfriend I would not steal
because that would be an unforgetable sin!

EagletonDiva
Member

since 2006-01-11

Posts 107

1 posted 2006-01-15 10:44 AM

how true, how true. it's been same way since the dawn of time.

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2006-01-27 12:16 PM

Im curious, since u wrote that how do u feel about that guy? I guess what I'm asking is do most people act on that emotion or do they restrian?

Katerie
Member

since 2006-01-27

Posts 92
Central New York

3 posted 2006-01-27 05:37 PM

It's essentially okay- it would work better if you used constant meter for your rhyme. Content is good, and the way you left it open for interpretation was interesting. Great effort.

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