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The Shadow in Blue
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0 posted 2006-07-04 05:36 PM


My Heart's Debacle

How do I express the way that I feel about you
without making a fool of the mess that is me
and bypass the fear that resignates in my heart
for these butterflies kill my chance at true love

Sometimes I get the courage to speak for my heart
but that all melts away when I look in your eyes
and remember the times that your embrace healed my soul
helping me forget the past long since dead

But when I see you with her, deep inside I cry
for in the recesses of my mind it's me where she is
the one recieving your affections and cuddling in your arms
but that will never happen 'cause it's her that makes you tick

And one thing I wouldn't want is to see you in tears
so instead I'll stand by and just be your friend
waiting for the time until you realize I'm there
your trusty broomstick, ready to sweep up the pieces
the ones shattered off straight from your heart

But until that day I'll be your guardian angel
and instead of my selfishness I'll be selfless indeed
pushing aside the stewing dreams in my heart
because I'll always need you,even just as a friend
for you helped me discover that I deserve love


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1 posted 2006-07-05 02:18 AM


whoa, this is soooo good.

I can really relate to this, or at least relate it to when I was younger.

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2 posted 2006-07-09 01:42 AM


Hey The Shadow in Blue,

Let me just say that you continue to astonish me in your poetry. The way you express yourself is simply amazing in my book! You have become one of my favorite poets on pip, I just hope that some day I might come close to writing something like this...

This part,


But until that day I'll be your guardian angel
and instead of my selfishness I'll be selfless indeed
pushing aside the stewing dreams in my heart
because I'll always need you,even just as a friend
for you helped me discover that I deserve love"


My favorite, yet so sad for me to read because ... Well, just because. At a time in my life I could've related really well to this, and i still can, just not in the same way anymore. Yet what I remember of those feelings, well, i think you said it just right in this poem.

Thanks for sharing once again, I can't wait to see more

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