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young_blood
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0 posted 2005-12-27 10:43 AM


Leather Sofas In a Hotel Lobby


There’s a rushing of water somewhere
out
east. But it’s of no matter, I’m not
quite sure of its purity. The impurity does
give it some flavor though, doesn’t it.
If we were flawless, would we
even know?

© Copyright 2005 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
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1 posted 2005-12-27 01:05 PM


If you go on the belief that flawless=perfection then no we wouldn't know because we wouldn't know imperfection or having flaws.  Right?

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 248

2 posted 2005-12-27 11:48 PM


Yeah, but even if we were flawless, we could invent flaws that don't exist, Right? So perfection itself could be flawed,in our eyes, kind of like the opposite of rose-colored glasses.


I dont know.
Thanks for the ideas, Alex. Enjoyed, yet again.

<3kerR

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
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eternal_echobassplayer
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since 2005-12-28
Posts 12
Tx, USA
3 posted 2005-12-29 01:03 PM


hmmm....this one was different...however very interesting... I liked it!
Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
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between space and time
4 posted 2006-01-06 01:08 PM


good food for thought in this one... who's eyes was the concept of perfection founded through? and who is that person to the rest of us anyway...hmmm anyway excellent write again my friend, much enjoyed

peace

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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5 posted 2006-01-08 12:21 PM


i think if we were flawless we wouldnt take the chance and "drink" of it. we would know to stay away or we would decide to "drink" and then we would no longer be flawless

how did you break my heart when it wasn't whole to start?

aol sn- tearsoflove13762

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2006-01-08 02:55 PM


"But it’s of no matter, I’m not
quite sure of its purity. The impurity does
give it some flavor though, doesn’t it."

I might rephrase this, m'self, because the logic is well, flawed.

I think I would change the second sentence to state:

"An impurity would give it some flavor though, wouldn't it."

because the first sentence acknowledges no knowledge of purity or impurity.

But then, that's just me.

smile...it wouldn't matter to me if I'd been deemed perfect. A true obsessive-compulsive, I'd polish anyway.

Much enjoyed this.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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Indianapolis, IN
7 posted 2006-01-12 04:47 PM


good catch there. i like your suggestion.
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