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secreteyes
Junior Member

since 2005-12-20

Posts 13
Wisconsin, United States

0 posted 2005-12-22 12:43 PM

I cried for help hoping someone was there
and indeed you were but you never did care
you did see my pain and you saw me cry
but you just walked away as I screamed “why”

but I guess I should thank you cause I found my own way
and now that I’m here I just gotta say
that it’s time you see I’m done with it
completely done with all your (edit)
you see I’m not as weak any more
I learned my mistake when I was before
I’ve been through so much and so many tears
been hurt so bad through out the years
but you never cared so you never knew
so now what do you think your words can do

yes, I hear you talking and Callin me names
But look I’m still walkin I’m done with these games
I’m finally standing on my own ground
never again will you take me down
now it will be me you’ll never forget
and all you did you will soon regret
so just remember and please don't doubt
I’m no longer scared I will take you out
I’ve lived through a lot and survived all of that
so why would I be scared to dispose of a rat

[This message has been edited by SEA (12-23-2005 01:19 AM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-12-23 01:22 AM

Hi Brittney,
I just wanted to let you know that I have edited out the astricked word in your poem.
Please be sure that you read the pip guidelines/ rules. Here is a link to them.
/pip/guidelines/rules.html

specifically,

"Misspelling a word, using asterisks to mask some or all letters, acronyms or abbreviations, or ANY other attempt to disguise profanity doesn't make it any less profane. If we can discern your meaning from your content, you obviously didn't disguise it enough.

In a few instances, our software will automatically replace a particular obscenity with asterisks. That doesn't make the replacement acceptable, but rather should be considered a warning to the author to take a closer look at their choice of words or choice of forum. Ignoring the warning from the software will probably just generate one from a Moderator."

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

2 posted 2006-02-06 03:35 PM

hey, i really liked this. I thought it was excellent. Keep it up!

XxnoraxX
Member

since 2006-01-24

Posts 122
<3 MA,,,USA <3

3 posted 2006-02-06 04:11 PM

Nice poem. GREAT JOB!

XxnoraxX

[This message has been edited by XxnoraxX (02-06-2006 06:49 PM).]

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

4 posted 2006-02-10 11:35 PM

Nice poem here! I loved it

x0x0
Free_Spirit07

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

5 posted 2006-03-09 02:37 PM

long and lovely.i loved it nice write

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

6 posted 2006-03-09 07:41 PM

I loved this poem.. i can see that there was a great deal of emotion put into it.. keep it up..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

7 posted 2006-03-10 01:38 AM

Hey,

I must say i loved this poem! You obviously put a lot of thought, time, and emotions into it.(wow... i'm getting tired, is emotions spelled right?)

Just one thing that really stood out to me was this line,"I learned my mistake when I was before", I couldn't figure out what you meant by that? Would you care to enlighten me?

Loved the poem though! More power to you

Keep writing

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