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Its Your Choice |
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Sexy Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 53 |
Life is to short to make mistakes That can shorten your life even more But guess you don't see that sumone in this world loves ya Guess you don't relize that your hurting urself I know you might hate me I know you might not wanna talk But soon you'll relize dat life is 2 short to short do wat your doing to short to relize who loves you But life gives you problems you have to learn how to slove them So this is your problem you have to make a choice Fix it or make it worse Right now your makein it worse Soon your relize your doing wrong Soon you'll make it ....hopefully But remember Even if you hate me I still love you You chose make it worse or make it better? This poem is to my sister who is dealing the wrong hand... [This message has been edited by Sexy (11-25-2005 06:37 PM).] |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Okay, This was VERY difficult to read, because of your grammar. I think it might have a good message, but if you want people to take the time to read and respond to your poetry, it's considerate to make it as grammatically correct as possible. Your poetry doesn't have to be perfect, but at least try to make an effort to edit your poetry. This poem reads like an Instant Message, and this isn't really the place for that. I think you'll get more comments if you correct grammar and spelling mistakes. In any case, Welcome to PiP! <3keryn When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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