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tearsoflove13762
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0 posted 2005-11-13 11:20 PM


So this was an english assignment. we had to write 80 lines in rhymed couplets so here goes it... its long really.....
Long long ago in a faraway land,
a queen gave birth and the life of a princess began.
Ceremonies were held in celebration,
the royal family had a beautiful creation.
As she grew her beauty enhanced,
everyman wanted to provide her romance.
The princess didn't make the best choices,
she'd loved and lost leaving her haunted by voices.
Her first love left her heart torn,
yet he was able to eliminate the burn.
She dwealt on her misconception,
how is love such a conflicting perception?
This love that I mentioned before,
had been neatly packaged and left by her feet on the floor.
It was intricate, real, and deep
each time they kissed, her heart would leap.
Everyone said they were soulmates,
little did she know, they both would be begging for rebates.
He did everything for her always,
even at their young age she looked forward to their old days.
He was patient, kind, and caring.
But she took it for granted- she was too daring.
Every aspect of their relationship was in place,
when they were apart she kept her eyes shut just to see his face.
Their affection grew to the point of no more escalation,
marriage and children was their only anticipation.
The princess was in love but bored.
Her adolescencec was being ignored.
Friends and fun are the epitome of teens,
could she skip that for the man of her dreams?
If shte did it would be an issue later,
we all know that'd lead to divorce then he'd hate her!
At this point it was easy for them to see,
they couldn't be together for eternity.
One of them had to say it,
someone had to make this crusade quit!
The princess knew she'd miss his laugh,
but it was time for them to split paths.
She was worried about his mindset though.
It sounds concieted but how could he let her go?
He was son sincere and wanted nothing more than her.
But this issue couldn't be aboided- it had to occur.
They agreed to stay friends of course.
This situation brought nothing less than remorse.
He said he couldn't just be her friend,
it was too difficult because he know it was the end.
The end of their relationship but not the end of their love,
that's why it's so difficult just for them to hug.
He claimed it hurt too much to be near the princess,
he wanted to love her, hold her, and give her a kiss.
Friendship just wasn't possible,
losing each other forever was begining to look probable.
The princess didn't know what to do,
being with this man was all she knew.
Upon their split-up many compromises were established,
they couldn't be together but atleast they could be friends as she'd wished.
After a few weeks the princess felt very alone,
occassionally she'd get to talk to him on the phone.
The conversation always remained geneeral,
not mentioning the overwhelming sadness was intentional.
It was acceptable that they didn't talk often,
she knew it was over and she'd lost him.
He was doing well and everything was ok,
she stayed quiet but sectetly thought of him each day.
The princess moved to a new environment,
the new found friendly faces were heaven sent.
Her friends were sincere but they never knew,
she left behind a story of love so true.
Seasons were changing and her birthday was soon to arrive,
she knew he'd remember- she didn't have to imply.
The princess wanted to hear him say "happy birthday",
it was all she wanted but he didnt call that day.
This was devestating and left her bewildered,
she didn't expect to see him but atleast a call she figured!
At this point the princess knew it was gone,
she'd loved and lost all that is fond.
This realization made her cry and cry,
Now it's confirmed- time to say goodbye.

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

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1 posted 2005-11-14 12:17 PM


oh but it is the saying good bye that really hurts...and when you really love someone, you can never really, tell them good bye...

wow that was long but it was really good. What grade did you get?

tearsoflove13762
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2 posted 2005-11-14 05:46 PM


well on the poem itself i made a 92.  thanks for the comment!

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3 posted 2005-11-14 08:42 PM


a 92 is very good!
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4 posted 2005-11-15 04:26 PM


Wow-that is a well deservered grade. It is an awesomw peice of work. I gotta know did that come out of nowhere or was there something behind it; cause wow. It's so discriptive. Absolutly great.

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I feel your pain."-Creed

tearsoflove13762
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5 posted 2005-11-15 07:55 PM


its about me and my ex and the birthday part was what just happened and just all of it has some meaning towards our relationship. i sent it to him.... havent gotten a response yet

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6 posted 2005-11-15 09:05 PM


Laura! I LOVED THIS!! such a good job, and im really really glad you scored well on it!

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tearsoflove13762
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8 posted 2005-11-15 10:13 PM


ha ha yeah lol i didnt like that either but... its a must for the assignment lol
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