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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248
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Her chair in the class was empty noone had tried to sit there (He tried not to blame himself) Her younger sister had been seen crying in the ladies' room (He quietly ignored the rumors) Her soccer team lost every game she missed after that night. (He cheered for them anyways) Her best friend lost all interest in homework or taking notes (He did both for her.) Her perfume on other girls followed him everywhere (The smell now made him sick) Her body is in the graveyard but her spirit haunts his dreams (He's trying to move on.) His brother carries his books home from school everyday (Crutches are hard to manage.) The trial was held on a Monday, while the whole town sat and watched (He was feeling really nervous.) Lawyers questioned her parents about that foggy night (He hung his head remorsefully) At the end of the trial the jury made a decision (He waited anxiously) One by One they filed back into the quiet courtroom (He shifted in his seat) One lonely man stood ready to read their verdict (He folded his hands in prayer.) "We deem the defendant Guilty of murder by D.U.I... (He put his face in his hands) And sentence him to spend the next sixteen years of his life in jail." (He felt tears roll down his cheeks) It was finally over after months of anxiety (He stood, slowly, his head still hung low) His girlfriend got her justice Now she could rest in peace (He smiled slightly as the other driver left the room in handcuffs.) <3 I might have messy hair, runny makeup and a tear-steaked face, but at least I know I have loved. |
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StarryEyed3 Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 58bostonia |
oh wow. this is heavy. if this really happened, i hope everything is alright, but things have a funny way of working themselves out, even in the toughest situations. if this is a work of fiction, i totally believed it. and i could relate because of similar alcohol-related problems. anyway, i liked this even though it broke my heart a little. "and i'll sit and wonder of every love that could have been |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
this was such a sad but good write Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Two thumbs up. At first I thought the parenthases transition would be a distraction, but you pulled it off nicely. Great imagery. Very touching. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
well done... well done indeed "Do not go gentle into that good night, |
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Leeds-Girl New Member
since 2005-12-07
Posts 8 |
I liked the poem it was very strong and very emotional although i did find it rather confusing i didnt really understand your characters and the whole plot of the poem but still a gud poem keep writing |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Thanks for commenting all<3 <3kerR When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
i always expect so much from you and today you completly flew above my expectations wow!!! |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
So sad but a wonderful write! Jessica |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey, This is another one of your poems that I really liked. The first time I read it, I had to sit and think about what I had read to make it make sense that you changed the person you were talking about when you made the break in the poem. I agree this is sad. Stuff like this is awful. This was a great piece. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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