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LOSTinTHISworld
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 94
canada

0 posted 2005-07-26 02:57 AM

im growing restless
with each day that goes by
i dont understand
why cant i cry
i used to feel depressed
i used to hate myself
but now
now i dont know what to hate
i look in the mirror
and see nothing but the wall behind me
maybe a bit of glare
from the tears i used to cry
and they remind me
just how much it hurts

as i walk down the beach
i watch as my shadow slowly fades
my soul dies a little quicker
footsteps no longer following me
for i walk down a path
which no one would want to follow
not even to save me

i feel like im drowning
as if im tied to a rock
at the bottom of the ocean
i should have tried to untie the rope
rather than struggling to break lose
i ran from my problems
but its too late now
i relax my body
as i lay limp at the bottom
im not panicking
i just dont understand how i got here
who tied me up
or did i do this to myself?

im scared that things will never change
that i will never have the strength
to untie these ropes
and breathe again
im scared that i will never see more
than a blank wall
staring back at me in the mirror
and i am scared
that my footsteps
may never catch up to me

{in a million years i wont be over you}

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

1 posted 2005-07-26 03:38 PM

"im scared that things will never change
that i will never have the strength
to untie these ropes
and breathe again"

Love that part...

Great job..

Lindsay
Member

since 2003-03-26

Posts 59
South Dakota

2 posted 2005-07-26 11:00 PM

awesome poem! i can totally relate. Keep on writing

I don't know much at all, I don't know wrong from right, All I know is that I love you tonight
-Good Charlotte

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

3 posted 2005-07-27 01:10 PM

i really enjoied this!
"and see nothing but the wall behind me
maybe a bit of glare"

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

4 posted 2005-07-27 08:21 PM

This is the first or your writes that's I've checked out, and I certainly feel that I have missed out.

i look in the mirror
and see nothing but the wall behind me

This is one of the best lines I've read in a while.

I do feel it is time for me to search out a few more of your posts.

Great Job.

http://www.mysticwicks.com
(try the after dark section)

doyouseemeforme
Junior Member

since 2005-06-25

Posts 18

5 posted 2005-08-31 02:20 PM

I think this is probably my favorite poem that I have ever read...WOW!

Death leaves a heartache no one can heal, love leaves a memory no one can steal.

I_dont_know_me
Junior Member

since 2003-12-08

Posts 48
UK, Cymru

6 posted 2005-09-01 05:14 AM

WOW! i loved it x

LOSTinTHISworld
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 94
canada

7 posted 2005-09-27 03:07 AM

wow, i dont think ive ever goten so many compliments, thaks a lot to all of you for taking the time to read my poem.

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