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StarryEyed3
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since 2005-06-26
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bostonia

0 posted 2005-07-22 12:57 PM


and we watch the stars
barely visible and
   solely unbruised
as my heart bleeds
into the very river
in which i am drowning

we grab and reach
and claw for
everything we can see
and nothing fits anymore
into my swollen grip

you run away,
erasing your sandy footprints
with even bigger steps
    so many emotions
but not enough time
and too too much uncertainty,
for the sea erases
everything
but tears

© Copyright 2005 Julie Burgess - All Rights Reserved
electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.
1 posted 2005-07-22 01:12 PM



I am in loveee with the ending. You write so beautifully...never stop.

-Kelly

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2 posted 2005-07-22 02:09 PM


Julie~

This is truly lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
3 posted 2005-07-24 09:42 AM


Sigh... Yes we all know this one lol.  Keep it up.

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
4 posted 2005-07-31 03:32 AM


Wow. This is so amazing. I don't think I can fully express right now how much I love this.
Perfect art. This is going in my library, thanks for sharing.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

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