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loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

0 posted 2006-06-27 02:58 PM

This poetry is the only thing
that can get these feelings off my chest
the only thing that can get these thoughts from my mind
They bring me peace as I write them
Yet when I read them, I cry
Full of Pain
Yet full of beauty
It would seem that they would trap me
always re-writing my sadness, pain, and doubt
But in the end
Its the only thing that set me free

"when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join them in a mutual weirdness and call it love-true love"

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-06-28 10:49 PM

Hey loveislove,

Very cool write!

Personally I never really thought about writing about poetry when writing… poetry? It’s something new for me to see and I’m sure others have done so but I never saw it until you posted it! I must not see a lot of poems or something… or you’re a one of a kind poet? Lol

Okay, I felt like this poem could use a little bit of polish around the edges, I know you get your point across in it but still, some of the wording and stuff could be changed to make it flow smoother over the tongue, you know?
That’s just what I think though and who knows, I’m probably wrong!

“ Full of Pain
Yet full of beauty
It would seem that they would trap me
always re-writing my sadness, pain, and doubt
But in the end
Its the only thing that set me free”

I loved this part, probably cause I can relate to being set free by writing and reading. Also the way you described it as full of pain yet full of beauty was so true to me! I really liked that part a lot…

Anyway, great write on this one I enjoyed it a lot. I can’t wait to see more from you

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bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

2 posted 2006-06-28 10:59 PM

basically a full ditto to stargals reply. I really loved this. how true it is. your point is plain and simple yet its described in a sort of complex manner...does that make any sense? i bet not. but my mind is complex so who knows. anyway i really like this alot.
i relate to it. how like..well the end part lol. i relate to that. just liek stargal. see! so its like a full ditto to her. okay okay enough said great write

Poetic Penquin
New Member

since 2006-06-27

Posts 2

3 posted 2006-06-29 01:27 PM

Great write. Poetry is a great way to express feelings and be set free. I don't always think about it like that but it is definately true. I liked the way you expressed that point.

xxFuschiaxx

Fuschia
Junior Member

since 2006-06-19

Posts 35
England

4 posted 2006-06-29 01:31 PM

Sorry about the post being from 'Poetic pequin'. It's from me really. It's just that my brother's username automatically comes up when i reply and i forgot to change it. Sorry.

Oh dear- i think it's the 2nd time i've done that.

xxFuschiaxx

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

5 posted 2006-06-29 07:38 PM

thanks...this is like the only one that i've gotten replies of that are basically all good...lol...anywho...yeah thanks...lol...

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