My Attempt to Capture Perfection

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Teen Poetry #7

My Attempt to Capture Perfection

Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

0 posted 2005-07-05 12:00 PM

Golden yellow rays of sun
Strands of entrancing light
flow down to her bronzed shoulders
eyes of emerald, topaz, and sapphire
make up the gates and windows to a soul
of unimaginable and unspeakable beauty
handwoven silk adorns her form
the form of a goddess
her heart is like fragile glass
it must be held with the slightest of touch
Aglow surrounds her form head to toe
her smile is intoxicating like Olympian Ambrosia
and her light can brighten the darkest of days
I pray that our love
will shine with the same purity
and her eyes always sparkle
when her gaze falls upon me
If her love for me is half as strong
as mine for her
then we will own forever
and eternity will be our plaything

-"Poet Nascitar, Non Fit"
-"A Poet Is Born, Not Made"

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

1 posted 2005-07-06 09:25 AM

I don't know why anybody hasn't commented
on this yet. I thought it was amazing. The
imagery just spills off of the page. It
was beautiful. Keep on writing.

-Kelly

SarBear
Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 205
Massachusetts

2 posted 2005-07-06 10:23 PM

this is great. great imagery and i like your use of a simile.

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