Haiku for You (versions I & II)

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Teen Poetry #7

Haiku for You (versions I & II)

StarryEyed3
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since 2005-06-26

Posts 58
bostonia

0 posted 2005-07-04 08:53 PM

hey everyone... i couldn't decide which version i liked better, or which middle line worked best with the others. let me know what you think?
strumming your guitar
thinking of the infinite
too shy to be mine
strumming your guitar
so concerned with tattoos but
too shy to by mine

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

1 posted 2005-07-06 09:29 AM

Hm, this was a hard decision but I'm
pretty sure I like this one better -

'strumming your guitar
so concerned with tattoos but
too shy to be mine'

I love haikus and I think you pulled
both of them off beautifully.
Keep writing.
-Kelly

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