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tearsoflove13762
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Texas.. and yes i have an accent

0 posted 2005-06-30 11:35 PM


Although we have known each other for five years,
been intimate with each other and you have wiped away so many of my tears;
you have yet to actually meet the girl behind these big blue eyes.

She is honest and trustworthy,
bold and beautiful,
strong-minded and stubborn,
messy and carefree.

Now you see this girl,
the one who sits behind her big blue eyes.

Will you still love her?
Still hold her?
Still wipe away her tears?


love will make you beautiful

© Copyright 2005 Laura Risner - All Rights Reserved
* shining star*
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since 2005-06-29
Posts 76
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1 posted 2005-07-01 12:07 PM


I really like this poem. Atually i really like all of your poems. You have a way with words that make them beautiful. Keep writing!
tearsoflove13762
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Texas.. and yes i have an accent
2 posted 2005-07-01 02:01 AM


thanks!
-Laura

Cloud 9
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since 2004-11-05
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Ca
3 posted 2005-07-01 11:01 AM


I totally agree with shining star. Yes, you are one of my favorites.
spaz02
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since 2005-06-28
Posts 74
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4 posted 2005-07-01 11:43 PM


this is really sweet. I wish it could of been longer.
~amber~

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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Texas.. and yes i have an accent
5 posted 2005-07-02 01:00 AM


gosh! that seems to be the main thing that disappoints the ppl that read my poetry. that is the hardest thing for me to do also. i can't concentrate on a single poem for longer than 5 or 10 min. i guess i have some work to do.

love will make you beautiful

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
6 posted 2005-07-11 07:03 AM


this is perfect as it is...
it is me except i have muddy brown eyes....
i love it too... keep writing this way... your poems are short but convey so many things within theem as they are... well done
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 248

7 posted 2005-07-11 08:14 AM


I agree with aussie...u definitely know me, except my eyes are brown. And just because your poems arent long doesnt mean anything. Leave the reader wanting more,i know thats what draws me back to your next poem.


<3

I cant believe how long i waited
for the boy to turn into my man...

Now if i could figure out, if it was worth the wait.

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
8 posted 2005-07-11 03:56 PM


ha ha thanks

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

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