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"For All My Pain"
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"For All My Pain" |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
"For All My Pain" Here is for all my pain; written in vain Blood for my ink; I'll never look back Wicked are my thoughts; very impure Positive not; negative sure I am lost; in the deepest pit of hell Sleeping in the nothingness; scared of my fate Darkness of misery; dreams are nightmares Scared of myself; scared of the past I can't look back; I never will Don't force me to look; I just might fail This is my pain; in which I will dwell Tears forever burn; the hall of shame is full Times ticking quick; I must do this fast Help myself; and fool you all If I fail to pass this test please forgive me; I can't hack this life anymore ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I put this into a poetry contest and it was put into the semi finals and will be published in a book!! AWSOME i think! |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
please tell me wut u think! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it feels like it was written fast and with a lot of emotion behind it  |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
i agree withe sea. you started out rhyming and nothing else through out the poem followed in any way. |
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shara Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 69florida/USA |
CONGRATS!!! hats off to you for making it to the semi finals and having your book published. This poem was ok, i liked it, i liked the message. shara |
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