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WranglrButts9
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since 2004-10-24
Posts 108
Iowa, US

0 posted 2005-06-26 03:35 PM


Tornado

I woke up this morning
With my eyes swollen shut
My pillow still damp,
And hair stuck to my face

Mascara stains the sheets
And tissues cover the floor
Photos are ripped in half
And strewn across the room

The mirror is cracked
And cds broken to pieces
My chair flipped upside down
The curtains pulled from the rod

Clothes are thrown everywhere
Pictures missing from their frames
There’s a dent in the wall
A plate shattered beneath it

The fan’s running on high
Making sounds as it spins
Though its still stifling hot
And my world is mute

The knuckles of my right hand
Are swollen and cut
I feel no pain
Nor remember what its from

The one thing I remember
Of last nights events
Are that you said goodbye
And my room paid the price
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Yes.. personal experience. But things go on, life prospers, & feelings mend. Kind of ends suddenly, but I thought that was kind of the whole point. Imagery.. yeah, I'm kind of critiquing (spelling??) my own work, but anyways... I thought the imagery was reallly good. Maybe its just cuz I was actually looking at it. I dont really know, but tell me what you thought!

Bailey


Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

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SwT DeViL
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since 2005-06-21
Posts 26
London
1 posted 2005-06-26 06:25 PM


hey i really like this...
im soz abt how things might've went....
but its most probably coz of the best...
take care

***...$wT DeViL...***

I'm Me... Coz I'm Not U... Ur U CoZ Ur NoT Me...

WranglrButts9
Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108
Iowa, US
2 posted 2005-06-26 11:31 PM


thanks for the reply... all that ranting & raving last night, we talked about it today.. and things are back to normal. heh.. ruining my room was worthless

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

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