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doyouseemeforme
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since 2005-06-25
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0 posted 2005-06-25 07:01 PM


I want you, I need you
more than you'll ever know,
I'm frightened, I'm scared
I don't want it to show.

You hold me, you touch me
you make me feel wanted,
you leave me, you do her
the noises I'm haunted.

The tears, the pain
everything that does follow,
heart broken, heart smashed
my body feels hollow.

I'm confused, I'm scared
I want to give you the key,
do you want it, do you need it
to see the real me.

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1 posted 2005-06-25 07:32 PM


wow what an emotional entrance! Welcome to pip. Please check your email for a special greeting!
SwT DeViL
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since 2005-06-21
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2 posted 2005-06-26 08:03 AM


hey this was really good...i enjoyed it a lot
take care

I_dont_know_me
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since 2003-12-08
Posts 48
UK, Cymru
3 posted 2005-06-26 08:36 AM


WOW i can so relate x x
doyouseemeforme
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since 2005-06-25
Posts 18

4 posted 2005-06-26 11:25 AM


thanx for your support !!!!

Death leaves a heartache no one can heal, love leaves a memory no one can steal.

WranglrButts9
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since 2004-10-24
Posts 108
Iowa, US
5 posted 2005-06-26 03:24 PM


Really good for a first post (I'm assuming?). I can really relate right now, so thanks for sharing.. I know I'm not alone anymore!

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

doyouseemeforme
Junior Member
since 2005-06-25
Posts 18

6 posted 2005-06-26 03:45 PM


this was my first post and I'm happy that you enjoyed it.  I'm sorry you can relate this poem means alot to me because its what I'm going through right now.

Death leaves a heartache no one can heal, love leaves a memory no one can steal.

spaz02
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since 2005-06-28
Posts 74
USA
7 posted 2005-06-29 09:06 PM


i like this alot...it kinda put a tear in my rye honestly...keep writing this tough stuff..
CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 248

8 posted 2005-06-29 09:26 PM


wow! welcome to piptalk first of all, then wow! i loved this. Fantastic first post*or any post for that matter* and i hope you'll continue writing! enjoyed.

_ker

I cant believe how long i waited
for the boy to turn into my man...

Now if i could figure out, if it was worth the wait.

tearsoflove13762
Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
9 posted 2005-06-29 11:17 PM


im with ya on this one im kinda goin thro it myself. great first post obviously wasnt your first write tho. welcome to pip

love will make you beautiful

* shining star*
Member
since 2005-06-29
Posts 76
PA,USA
10 posted 2005-06-29 11:25 PM


Wow...i really like this poem. Keep um comin
~*BayBee*~
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since 2003-04-09
Posts 65
In The Clouds...
11 posted 2005-07-21 05:09 AM


that was a great poem! It really started you out nice on Pip! You used great words to emphasize the feelings... Keep up the good work and i loved this piece of work..
*Holly*

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