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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2005-05-13 09:46 PM

Without seeing the dimples on your cheeks,
And hearing you scurrying my way,
Knowing you are but a second or two
Away-

Knowing that you are no longer here,
And realize that there is no message
On my phone that says I miss you-
Or I love you,

This heart does not beat to your tone,
And my breathing doesnâ€™t speed up,
My eyes no longer shine as I think of
Your smile,

My hands never shake and open up
To hug anyone so tight and hold them
Just right-

Through the nightmares at night,
And the fears in daylight, I made it,
Without you,

Be gone from my heart, and my life
Which you left many months with
No care-

I will do alright, without your touch,
You were my habit, and I quit you
Today.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

1 posted 2005-05-16 08:44 AM

this is beautiful.... its exactly what i went thru just over a month ago with my ex... well written and you get all the emotions and put images to them to bring out more in your work... keep ones like this coming
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

2 posted 2005-05-16 03:08 PM

***smiling*** yep me too. Just went through this as well.

I love this. this is a keeper.

StarryEyed3
Member

since 2005-06-26

Posts 58
bostonia

3 posted 2005-06-27 10:23 PM

i love this too- i can definitely relate. it's such a relief when you find you can live without that person, but i always find myself thinking about how easy it would be to fall again. anyway, can't wait to read more...

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

4 posted 2005-06-27 10:31 PM

Thanks for the comments.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

shara
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 69
florida/USA

5 posted 2005-06-28 05:05 PM

i really really really like this one. that is exactly how i am feeling right now, you did a wonderful job on this peice, hats of to you.

shara

spaz02
Member

since 2005-06-28

Posts 74
USA

6 posted 2005-06-29 08:59 PM

i like this..alot! its so true and i can relate to it...i know this is excellent!
~spaz02~

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

7 posted 2005-06-29 10:35 PM

you guys make a poor guy blush...

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

8 posted 2005-06-29 11:19 PM

i cried through this entire thing cause i know i need to "quit" my x today but... its hard to do when you think you love someone.

love will make you beautiful

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

9 posted 2005-06-29 11:31 PM

thanks for your commentssignature-->

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

[This message has been edited by Xeonox (07-01-2005 06:24 PM).]

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