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tearsoflove13762
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0 posted 2005-05-02 01:51 AM



If I was a painter,
I would paint buttercups all over your face.

If we were together I would be as happy as a flamingo's pink wings.

If I was an island girl I would suf on the blue shoulders of the sea.

I am the orange of a comet's tail,
and the emerald of a mermaid's scales.

I am turquoise like the fingerprints of the waves, and purple like the wings of the sunrise.

You will never find a girl like me;
I am like the pot of gold you always find at the end of a rainbow.

-hold on to the one you love

© Copyright 2005 Laura Risner - All Rights Reserved
dodge_chick2003
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1 posted 2005-05-02 02:11 AM


I didnt really understand this poem so I cant give you any advice...sorry
tearsoflove13762
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2 posted 2005-05-02 02:38 AM


its just random...

-hold on to the one you love

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3 posted 2005-05-02 09:21 AM


each line is pretty on it's own, but all together, they are very random...not that that is bad, it's just not as pulled together as it could be.
CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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4 posted 2005-05-02 10:11 PM


i liked it. yeah, slightly random, i agree there, but it made sense to me. I couldnt relate, but i kinda wish i could, as insane as that might make me sound...


Keryn

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